Ollie Johnson
AS/A2 Media

We have got some feedback on our first draft from other members of our class and our teachers. From our class it was mostly positive with comments made about the camera shots used and the editing. Our teachers brought up the problem with the lighting towards the end and we knew this was an issue and would have to be re-filmed. They said that overall it was well filmed but it lacked dramatic tension and coherence. They also suggested that we made the chase shorter and add in the flashbacks that we had planned to use to give it more narrative. They also suggested that we add more close ups.